Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 54- Kendryk

weekend writing warriorsIt’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

Here comes trouble! While he’s out fortifying Terragand’s borders in case Teodora strikes, Kendryk runs into a large cavalry force. He guesses  correctly that it’s led by Arian Orland, who has been conducting unauthorized raids  on Teodora’s allies in Kendryk’s name..

Count Orland dismounted, swept his helmet off and went down in the mud on one knee. “Your Grace, a most unexpected honor.”

Taken aback, Kendryk dismounted. “Please rise. There’s no need to stand on ceremony. You haven’t done so until now.”

Orland stood, then threw back his head and laughed, showing a mouth full of white teeth. Black hair fell to his shoulders, framing a singularly handsome face. He stood a good half head taller than Kendryk, who had the fleeting notion that maybe this was the ruler Father Landrus was always going on about. He looked the part.

Aw, poor insecure and slightly short Kendryk! Will this new ally be more trouble than he’s worth? Probably!

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27 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 54- Kendryk
  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    Of course he’s going to be more trouble than he’s worth. You’re still busy piling up problems, not solving them!

  2. Kim Magennis says:

    Hmmm. Beware the comely warrior, he is more and less than he seems!

  3. pmillhouse says:

    I’m liking the descriptions in this snippet, Christina. I could see Orland’s black hair and his white teeth. Great meeting between these two, and I wonder what sort of trouble’s brewing for their future?

  4. daezarkian says:

    Terrific character description!

  5. Evelyn Jules says:

    You write so fluidly it’s easy to picture this entire scene unfolding. The dialogue/descriptions are wonderful! Great work, Christina! 🙂

  6. Frank Fisher says:

    Love the comparison between Orland and Kendryk. Your writing flows so naturally well.

  7. Great snippet, Christina!

  8. Really clear excerpt! You’ve set up tension between these two subtly yet it’s there. Kendryk probably doesn’t notice it but your readers will. Kudos!

  9. This is a great snippet. Very descriptive!

  10. Alexis Duran says:

    Oh, that Count Orland. What a great character. I love the way you introduce him. Even though Kendryk is Orland’s superior, he seems immediately at a disadvantage.

  11. A fun comparison of the two.

  12. Interesting contrast in this bit, with Kendryk feeling at such a disadvantage to Orland. This a great ripple in your characters that helps create a richer world. Well done.

  13. Eleri Stone says:

    It’s hard to trust someone so good-looking and confident. Excellent snippet:D

  14. Well he’s going to be quite a handful, isn’t he? Nice snippet 🙂

  15. We just met Orland and already we can see he’s going to be a handful! Well done excerpt, to convey all that to the readers so easily.

  16. Hmm, I’m not sure how I feel about Count Orland, at this point he seems very arrogant and like he is going to cause a ton of trouble. Great scene though!

  17. Looks aren’t everything, though I bet it’s hard for him to feel that way, standing next to that tall and dashing warrior!

  18. Hmm…Kendryk might not be enthralled with how handsome he is, but I am! lol. Fantastic description, Christina! I love a handsome character. 🙂

  19. ED Martin says:

    Great description of Orland – it really showed the power dynamics between the two men.

  20. shanjeniah says:

    I’ve got this personal rule: Never ever trust someone who pays due tribute, then follows it up with laughter. Especially if they seem very aware of their attractiveness, and aren’t above using it to put themselves on a superior footing, even subtly.

    Be wary, Kendryck.

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