Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 191- Anton
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Sword of Destiny is in full-blown reorganization, but I’m proceeding with snippets as if that weren’t the case. So it’s possible the end result will be very different from what you’ve seen so far. Anyway, we’re back to Anton. He’s secured a small but important city for the king and is outside its walls, retrieving cannon that the fleeing enemy left behind. It’s foggy, and Anton suddenly finds himself under attack.
A horseman swooped down on him, holding a pistol, but Anton fired first. The man fell, and Anton snatched at the the horse, the reins slipping through his fingers as it ran off. He grabbed his other pistol, but a saber struck him in the side of the head before he could fire. The blade clanged off his helmet, but Anton saw stars before realizing he’d dropped his pistol.
“There he is,” someone shouted, and Anton hoped they weren’t talking about him as he struggled to draw his sword. Several horsemen converged on him, knocking him to the ground. It seemed they didn’t want to kill him, which didn’t make difference to Anton. An instant later, a blade touched his throat.
A fair-haired young man with bright blue eyes leaned down from his horse and said, “Do you surrender, Count Kronek?”
“I do,” Anton spat, dropping his sword.
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He didn’t have much choice but to surrender, it seems. I wonder, though, why they wanted him alive rather than dead. What’s in store for him?
His captors got lucky, at least this time.
Yes, with that many people surrounding him, he couldn’t so much else. Now, he’s their prisoner, which could be worse than death.
This isn’t the first time Anton’s been captured, the poor guy!
Oh no!
You do such a good job of writing action withut getting bogged down in details! I could so easily visualize that!
Thank you! I always seem to have to rewrite action scenes a lot, so I’m glad it worked for you.
Oh no. Anton! He always seems to find his way into trouble, doesn’t he?
He wouldn’t be Anton if he didn’t. 🙂
Wonderfully compelling scene, Christina! Remember, books are like children – some are more difficult to raise than others but they eventually get there with love, and patience and a lot of hard work.
Thanks! That’s a great analogy!
Well that certainly didn’t go well for him! Vividly described scene, made it so easy to visualize the action going on…great snippet!
Thank you!
They clearly knew who he was. Trouble is, being known and taken alive isn’t always a good thing!
Exactly!
I bet he’s wishing he’d taken help to get that cannon. Good job describing the fight scene. Very realistic.
He did bring some help, but they all got scattered in the fog,
Oh no – he’s cornered. What’s next?
This cannot bode well for him. They had been sent to capture him, which means they have plans for him. I’m sure they are not good plans. Great snippet!
They definitely have plans for him!
I love the action! 😀
Thank you!
Lots of action, but he had no choice but to surrender.
He’s had to do it before, unfortunately.
Outnumbered! He didn’t stand a chance. Gripping snippet!
Thank you!
Well, darn. Now I have to worry about Anton again! Great scene.
Can’t have you getting too comfortable! 😉
Surrendering seems the best thing to do for now. Great action scene.
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