Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 176- Carina
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After getting stuck for a few weeks, I’m back to writing! I guess the middle of the middle book is always especially middle-y. That always spells trouble for me.
Continuing with Sword of Destiny. It’s been a few weeks since the king visited Carina in her cell, and she’s heard nothing more from him. Duke Magnus Torsen is the king’s best friend, commander in chief, and a former commander of Carina’s.
byWhen the door next opened it was Magnus Torsen, walking into the cell with a pronounced limp.
βYour Grace!β Carina sprang to her feet, βyouβre hurt,β she said, forgetting he was no longer a friend.
βGetting better every day,β Magnus looked at her carefully, βBornholm was a terrible battle.β
Carina nodded, unable to speak.
βIβm so sorry about Tor; a good man and a better friend. Iβm sure you miss him terribly. I know I do.β
Carina looked down.
βThe king thought it might be better if I talked to you.β
The king was probably right; Magnus had always been the kind of commander who impressed with a calm confidence and Carina always obeyed him without a second thought, just as she had Tor.
I’m curious as to where this conversation will lead.
Not where either one of them expects!
But will she listen to him this time? π
She’s getting desperate!
Like the set up and the respect between them. A safe middle ground for progress?
They’ll make progress, but they aren’t the only ones who have to agree.
You’re able to convey so much in this short scene. Really nicely written. And kudos to you for muddling through the tricky middle part! π
Thank you!
Yes that whole ‘middle’ thing can be so tricksy LOL. Enjoyed the snippet, very clever to send him in to reason with her!
Thank you! I always struggle with the middle. However, once I make it through, things usually stay easier to the end. Knock wood.
Interested to see how she’ll react to him now that they’re officially enemies.
The underlying respect makes it tough to take a hard line
When I get stuck in the middle, one trick I’ve learned is to either kill off a character or introduce a new one.
But I’m trying not to kill so many characters in this series! π
Ed, killing is good although one might have to face jail-time. As for the limping gentleman, I have a feeling their meeting won’t go well.
Always make it look like an accident! π It’s going to have a different outcome than he was expecting.
Obeying someone without a question can be dangerous.
She’s learning that now!
Will she give in? Tough spot for her to be in…
She’ll come up with another way to negotiate
Waiting to see how he will convince her…
It’ll have to be a compromise
So when is this book supposed to be out?
I’m shooting for the end of September
I really enjoyed this snippet – and I like the way she ‘forgets’ he’snolonger friend!
The tragedy of a civil war.
You just can’t take it easy on your characters, can you? π
Oh c’mon, that would be boring!
The more this guy tries to manipulate her, the less I want her to give in!
That’s the spirit!
She’s stronger than he gives her credit for. Good that they show respect for each other before the negotiations begin.
I can’t wait to get to the middle of my story. I’m stuck on Chapter Three!!! I’ve never been stuck so early in a story. GAH! Glad you’re back writing. Nice snippet.
Oh, no! Thatβs rough. Usually the beginning is pretty easy, though I had a hard time getting started on a last in series. Hope it gets easier!