Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 102- More Winter of the Wolf
It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.
Winter of the Wolf is off to beta readers! Whew! So it only seems right that I continue with a little teaser. Last week, 12-year-old Duke Devyn Bernotas was acting like a real brat. Braeden had him join the hunt for the deadly Daciana Tomescu, but there was no extra horse for him, so he had to double up with Trisa Torresia, Braeden’s best friend’s daughter, and his most trusted officer. Days later, there’s still no sign of Tomescu and Braeden can see Devyn is feeling down, so he goes over to talk to him while they’re taking a break. Some creative punctuation.
Devyn looked up at Braeden anxiously. “I’m not slowing you down, am I? It seemed like such a good idea—going along with you—but now I’m not sure; I hope I didn’t do the wrong thing.”
“It’s all right,” Braeden said, clapping him on the shoulder, realizing that all of Devyn’s bravado earlier had been just that. “When I was your age I would have done the same; it’s hard to stay put when there’s fun to be had.”
“I hope it’ll be fun, though I pictured it all rather differently. I thought I’d have my own horse and we’d go galloping through the forest, as if we were on a hunt.”
Braeden had to smile at that, “Well, this is a hunt all right, but our quarry is a bit more dangerous than a stag. If we see her, I want you to stay with Lieutenant Torresia, no matter what; can you promise me that?”
Devyn nodded, “she’s all right for a commoner, isn’t she?”
By the end of this book, Devyn’s attitude toward “commoners” will have undergone a radical shift.
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I like seeing this side of Devyn.
Thanks! I was a little worried he came off as way too bratty last week. He’s actually a pretty good kid, with a few things to learn.
Ah! the teaser’s in that last little line there, eh?
Haha- yes. Hopefully you’ll get the book this week.
That last line says a lot. Nice snippet! 🙂
Thank you!
Loved how you were really able to encompass what a younger boy would have been picturing when thinking of the adventure of the hunt (vs reality). Looking forward to where this is going!
Thank you! He’s still laboring under a few illusions.
Last line says a lot in a few words. Tweeted.
Ah, the judgment of youth. I think he has some lessons to learn still. Great snippet.
Yes, he’s going to learn a lot in the next few months.
Seems as if this trip is going to involve a lot of growing up for Devyn. Well done snippet!
Thanks! He’s at the beginning of quite a journey.
I can’t wait to read this book, Christina. Hope your beta readers are fast!
If all goes well, it’ll be out in November, December at the latest. I don’t want my beta readers to be too fast- I need a break!
He is learning several new things!
Love the interaction between these two. Great snippet.
Thank you!
A lesson for the young man and soon.
Yes, many lessons ahead!
Thank you for redeeming Devyn. lol. I’m glad he’s not the total snob I’d begun to fear he was. 🙂
He’s not too bad- in fact I’m rather fond of him. 😀
He’s not so bad, is he? Maybe a little immature, but I’m guessing that things will happen in the near future that mean he’ll have to grow up quite quickly.
Yes, he’s going to grow up a little too fast, starting very soon!
Devyn turned out to be an OK kid.
Like most 12-year-olds, he has his moments!
I see there is hope for Devyn after all.
Great last line. Tells us so much about the world and the characters.
Thank you!
Like us all he has more than one side to him. And he is only twelve after all. Kids are only brats if they are brought up to be like that. I’m sure the experiences of riding with Braeden will make him grow up a bit. Good snippet.
Very true! His parents are pretty down to earth for a prince and princess. Devyn gets most of his snobbishness from everyone else kowtowing to him. Braeden won’t though, which makes him a good influence.
Great snippet! Braeden is definitely the person you want to be around if you’re interested in adventure and growing up. 😉
Haha, yes. If he were around today, he’d be a scoutmaster!
Devyn is such a kid, but he’s growing up. Nice job.
Thank you!
At least he recognizes that he did something he shouldn’t have–and is willing to make some compromises. Hopefully he keeps his word!
It’s helpful that he really looks up to Braeden, so he’ll mostly behave himself.
The last line is revealing. I can’t wait for his attitude to change.
He’s more human here, though still rather arrogant. He has a few things to learn.
Some hard lessons coming for this boy!
Yay! Another snippet with Braeden & Devyn. It seems like he still has a lot to learn but he is only 12. So that’s to be expected. XD …Great snippet!
Thank you! Yes, this book is going to be one big learning experience for him.
Great interaction between the two, Christina. You’ve done an excellent job of using the differences in speech patterns to show the age difference.
I like the last little bit you added after the snippet. Can’t wait to get lost in this world again soon. 🙂 I’m also dropping a link to my snippet; apparently the form didn’t submit my link! http://witandtravesty.com/weekend-writing-warriors-snippet-63/
Won’t be too much longer, I hope!
Certainly a big change in Devyn compared to last week. I like seeing characters undergoing big personality changes and how writers depict them. Nicely done.
Thank you!
Nice characterization of Devyn. Enjoyed the snippet!
Thank you!
Now this attitude I like, it shows that he’s really just a worried kid. Great snippet!
Yes, he had a bit of bluster going on at first. 🙂
A lot of naivete is present in that last line. It demonstrates good characterization. Nice snippet!
Thank you!