Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 57- Janna
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After Braeden rescues Janna in the woods, he’s ordered to return to Teodora since she’s finally received reinforcements and is ready to take back her besieged capital. When Janna hears about this, she’s very worried, since she’s still a wanted rebel. She finally decides to tell Braeden, who’s become a semi-awkward friend/acquaintance. They take a moonlit walk around camp and she starts by expressing her concern that she’ll be so near the empress. Braeden says:
“You keep going on about that. It’s as though you think she has a personal interest in doing you harm. I’m sure she does not.”
“But she does,” Janna said, then explained about Dimir and the proclamation. As terrified as she was about how he might react, it was a relief to tell him.
Braeden stopped short. There was a half moon, but it was bright, and she saw his face clearly. At first he wore a puzzled expression, then burst out laughing.
She took a few steps back, not sure what to make of this.
He stopped laughing when he saw her face and said, “I believe you, but you are the unlikeliest rebel I’ve ever seen.”
Dimir was Janna’s first husband and was executed for being a rebel at the beginning of this story. The empress wanted all the rebel’s families rounded up as well, which is how Janna ended up on a wanted poster.
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Edited to add: I just got a really nice 5-star review of Rise of the Storm from blogger Kate M. Colby!
“With a full cast of characters, political intrigue, romance and a dash of violence, it has everything sword-wielding fantasy lovers crave. . . .”
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Yay! I love Janna. 🙂
This snippet shows one thing that Braedon needs to learn: not to judge people by their looks!
Awe, very cute scene between Braedon and Janna. I could really feel that pause before he burst out laughing. Great job!
I love it when a snippet makes me smile–and this one did. Awkward friendship? I wonder if it will turn to more? 🙂
Oh goodness. Poor girl, she’s all stressed out and he just laughs. Fun little snippet.
They have very different responses to danger. Which is why he’s a mercenary and she’s . . . not. 🙂
LOL! Congrats on the review, by the way.
I love awkward friendships between characters. To me that often keeps the personal side of a story particularly interesting. Anxious to see more of this scene.
Thanks, Marcia!
Braeden and Janna’s “awkward” friendship is one of the real sweet spots in this book. Love their interactions.
I do love them, and especially enjoyed writing those awkward parts.
She is true rebel. When will he learn?
Lovely balancing of opposites here Christina: Awkward yet comfortable, dread and humour. Awesome snippet
Thank you! I love writing these two- they couldn’t be more different.
Great dialogue scene. Wonder how she’s going to respond to that? 🙂
I’m glad she decided to confide in him but if I were her, his reaction would be making me angry about now. Well done snippet!
Yes,the poor girl is upset and he’s not taking her concern very seriously, at least not yet. 🙂
That’s the problem with just killing people all over the place. Some of their loved ones will fight back.