Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 23- Braeden
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When we last saw Braeden, he was being hauled off to the dungeon, his fate uncertain. After a month or so, he’s suddenly released with no explanation. and reunited with his commander and friend Prince Novitny and his trusty side-kick, Franca. Some creative punctuation and editing has been inflicted upon the following passage.
“Well it’s about time,” Novitny roared, clapping him in a rib-cracking embrace. “Thought that bitch was going back on her promise.”
“Sir,” Franca tugged at his sleeve,. “Please don’t talk about the Empress like that so loud in the middle of camp. Lots of unfriendlies about.”
“Everyone knows how I feel about that wicked hag, though you’re probably right,” he winked at Franca while steering Braeden into his tent. “If it hadn’t been for this clever girl I wouldn’t have figured out how to get you released.”
Inside the tent, Braeden collapsed into a chair while Novitny poked Franca in the ribs, “Don’t just stand around lieutenant; go see about getting the man some food. Looks like he hasn’t eaten in weeks.”
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I see in this incarnation of reality the women are STILL the ones feeding everyone! LOL
So are Franca and Braedon a “thing” then?
Well, I had to leave off the next sentence in which Franca yells at someone else to bring food. 🙂 They have more of a father/daughter relationship, though they’re pretty close.
LOL Well that’s a relief!
I have other romantic plans for Braeden, which you’ll probably be able to figure out pretty soon!
I like Novitny immediately! You have me curious about several things in this eight. I’m wondering what the empress is like, and how Braeden got caught, and how Franca got him released. Well done.
You’ll meet the empress soon- I hope! Braeden was imprisoned for arresting a close friend of the empress- just doing his job. 🙂 There should be more about how he got released in the next few weeks as well. It takes so long, doing this eight sentences at a time. 🙂
Ah, but it’s fun : ) You just keep us hanging on…
Love it, love it, love it! Yes it is already sounding like Franca and Braeden are to become an item, I’m excited to see where this goes!
Thanks! My lips are sealed. Until next week, that is. 😉
I hope none of those unfriendlies heard what he said about the Empress!
Well, Novitny has a bit of diplomatic immunity, within reason. Unfortunately, the Empress isn’t always reasonable.
I’m with Millie, Novitny is a great character. Happy to see Braeden out of prison and available to get into fresh trouble. Fabulous eight, as usual.
Thank you! I realize that perhaps my mercenaries shouldn’t be so lovable, but I just can’t help myself. 🙂
Oh, I wonder what it cost them to get Braeden out. Love Novitny as a character;). Great 8.
Thanks! I will try to explain how they got Braeden out, eight sentences at a time, of course!
I get the feeling that some favors come with too high a price, no?
Right now, it looks like they made a good deal, but before long Braeden will wish he were back in that comfy dungeon!
Exciting with wonderful characters. You’ve taken us to a different time and place so effortlessly.
Thank you!
Good introduction of Novitny. Readers will be eager for more of him. Just as a side question – who are your POV character(s) in this?
Thanks- he’s fun to write. This scene is Braeden’s pov, but the story as a whole alternates between him, Janna, Kendryk and Gwynneth.
Terrific dialogue, Christina!
Thank you!
Novitny and Franca are certainly interesting new people for us to meet…I’m wondering what exactly it took to get Braeden released. Excellent excerpt!
Thank you! I just love writing those two.
Great job on the dialogue! I got a good sense of their friendship through these eight. 🙂
Thank you! I really enjoy writing these three together.
So is Franca the brain to Novitny’s brawn then? He has a great voice, and his personality it pretty apparent, which leaves me curious about Franca, and about the plan that got Braeden released.
Haha, yes! Sometimes I think Franca is the brains of the whole operation.
Just because people know what you think doesn’t mean you should insult someone so powerful so loudly… Novitny is going to come to a bad end if he keeps that up!
Yeah, he’s all valor, no discretion.