Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 138- Devyn
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From Shield of Kings. I’m going to be bad, and a tiny bit spoilery. After a few seconds’ contemplation, I decided it would harm no one to know that Devyn and Maryna survive the whole Desolate Empire saga. I was about to say I’m not horrible enough to murder children, but that’s actually a total lie, isn’t it? So let’s just say, I didn’t murder these particular children and I don’t care who knows!. 🙂
While the rebellion in Norovaea is underway, King Arryk manages to send a plea for help to his niece, Princess Maryna, ruler of Terragand. Devyn gets the message first and brings it to his sister so they can read it together. Some editing and punctuation abuse has occurred.
byMaryna was alone in her study, except for her secretary, scribbling away at a little desk in the corner.
“News from Uncle Arryk,” Devyn said, waving the pouch, carefully avoiding the secretary’s gaze.
“Oh goodness,” Maryna said, “you’d better have a seat.” She turned to the secretary while Devyn pulled up a chair, “Take a break Lara, and I’ll send for you later.”
The girl slowly left the room, her lively hazel eyes staying on Devyn as long as she could decently manage it.
He kept his eyes resolutely straight ahead even as he felt his ears warm. He’d only ever stolen one kiss from Lara, and he’d been a bit drunk at the time, but she seemed to think more would be forthcoming.
“Goodbye, Lara,” Maryna said, very firmly, and once the door was shut, she smiled at Devyn. “You really need to stop kissing the servants.”
“I don’t kiss them,” Devyn protested, “Usually.”
Well, good for you … I guess … for not murdering the children. 😉
From his actions, I’d guess that Devyn is a teenager. As a parent of four children, I can tell you that murdering teenagers is understandable though highly frowned on.
Yes, Devyn is eighteen. By already drafting this sequel, I ensure his survival in book six, no matter how annoying he may be!
LOL His sister knows him well. A great snippet! 🙂
lol. That last line. His sister definitely sounds like she wouldn’t believe him and I don’t blame her.
She knows he’s a bit of a handful
He sounds like a bit of a scamp 🙂
Just a tad. 🙂
lol – fabulous snippet.
Tweeted.
A very sisterly comment!
Haha, his sister knows him well. Great snippet.
Charming and so much fun!
hehe. How often does he break that custom?
Not too often- he’s relatively well-behaved for an 18-year-old
What a great scene! I could really feel the secretary’s emotions….wow, well done.
Thanks! Poor girl doesn’t stand a chance.
“You really need to stop kissing the servants.” Lol! Great snippet. And glad at least these children survive. 😉
I figured I could at least off that comfort. 🙂
o_O
Well that was a sort of flummoxed face!
Are you flummoxed? 🙂
Sister knows him well.
I really loved the last lines. Made me chuckle.
I chuckled too at the last line. Since he’s so young, he can be a scamp–instead of a cad. LOL
Oh, he’s not getting away with anything. And he’d better heed her advice. That sort of behavior can comeback to haunt you in a plethora of ways.
If he’s only kissed the one servant, that’s a little unfair. Though she’s still probably right. getting drunk and kissing people is probably not a great idea.
Yay! Devyn gets his own chapters! And I love that last paragraph. 😀
Love this: “The girl slowly left the room, her lively hazel eyes staying on Devyn as long as she could decently manage it.”
I love the comment about kissing the servants. It ticked my funnybone:-)
+LOL – I enjoyed the excerpt very much and that last line made me smile!