Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 138- Devyn

It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

From Shield of Kings. I’m going to be bad, and a tiny bit spoilery. After a few seconds’ contemplation, I decided it would harm no one to know that Devyn and Maryna survive the whole Desolate Empire saga. I was about to say I’m not horrible enough to murder children, but that’s actually a total lie, isn’t it? So let’s just say, I didn’t murder these particular children and I don’t care who knows!. 🙂

While the rebellion in Norovaea is underway, King Arryk manages to send a plea for help to his niece, Princess Maryna, ruler of Terragand. Devyn gets the message first and brings it to his sister so they can read it together. Some editing and punctuation abuse has occurred.

Maryna was alone in her study, except for her secretary, scribbling away at a little desk in the corner.

“News from Uncle Arryk,” Devyn said, waving the pouch, carefully avoiding the secretary’s gaze.

“Oh goodness,” Maryna said, “you’d better have a seat.” She turned to the secretary while Devyn pulled up a chair, “Take a break Lara, and I’ll send for you later.”

The girl slowly left the room, her lively hazel eyes staying on Devyn as long as she could decently manage it.

He kept his eyes resolutely straight ahead even as he felt his ears warm. He’d only ever stolen one kiss from Lara, and he’d been a bit drunk at the time, but she seemed to think more would be forthcoming.

“Goodbye, Lara,” Maryna said, very firmly, and once the door was shut, she smiled at Devyn. “You really need to stop kissing the servants.”

“I don’t kiss them,” Devyn protested, “Usually.”

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29 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 138- Devyn
  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    Well, good for you … I guess … for not murdering the children. 😉

    From his actions, I’d guess that Devyn is a teenager. As a parent of four children, I can tell you that murdering teenagers is understandable though highly frowned on.

  2. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    LOL His sister knows him well. A great snippet! 🙂

  3. aldreaalien says:

    lol. That last line. His sister definitely sounds like she wouldn’t believe him and I don’t blame her.

  4. kckendricks says:

    He sounds like a bit of a scamp 🙂

  5. daryldevore says:

    lol – fabulous snippet.
    Tweeted.

  6. A very sisterly comment!

  7. Haha, his sister knows him well. Great snippet.

  8. hehe. How often does he break that custom?

  9. What a great scene! I could really feel the secretary’s emotions….wow, well done.

  10. Fallon says:

    “You really need to stop kissing the servants.” Lol! Great snippet. And glad at least these children survive. 😉

  11. Sister knows him well.

  12. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    I really loved the last lines. Made me chuckle.

  13. Diane Burton says:

    I chuckled too at the last line. Since he’s so young, he can be a scamp–instead of a cad. LOL

  14. Jenna Jaxon says:

    Oh, he’s not getting away with anything. And he’d better heed her advice. That sort of behavior can comeback to haunt you in a plethora of ways.

  15. If he’s only kissed the one servant, that’s a little unfair. Though she’s still probably right. getting drunk and kissing people is probably not a great idea.

  16. Yay! Devyn gets his own chapters! And I love that last paragraph. 😀

  17. Andrea R Huelsenbeck says:

    Love this: “The girl slowly left the room, her lively hazel eyes staying on Devyn as long as she could decently manage it.”

  18. Kim Magennis says:

    I love the comment about kissing the servants. It ticked my funnybone:-)

  19. Hywela Lyn says:

    +LOL – I enjoyed the excerpt very much and that last line made me smile!

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