Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 133- Trystan

It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

Fall of the Titan is live and still on sale through Sunday! Scroll down for details. Since Trystan is having the most fun at this point in the book, I thought I’d give you another snippet of his. After his unsettling conversation with a local priestess, Trystan returns to where he left Natalya, but she’s gone. He’s told she left with some clerical types, so he hurries back to the temple, where the mean priestess has already arrested Natalya and plans to try her for heresy. The priestess wants to grab Trystan too, but he fights his way through the temple guards. Edited from published version.

An unwary guard stood outside, and Trystan bowled him over, then grabbed the halberd he dropped. The other guards were outside now, and Trystan swung the halberd at them in a wide arc. One blundered past him down the stairs and the other ran into Trystan’s blade face-first.

More guards were coming now; he had to get out of here, and fast. He scanned the temple square and spotted his mule, nibbling at grass growing between cobblestones near the stairs. Trystan gathered up his robes and leapt down the stairs, taking them three at a time, still holding the halberd.

The mule startled at his sudden appearance and jumped away, but Trystan already held the reins. The guards were right on his heels, but backed up as he took another swipe with the blade. He took advantage of a moment’s confusion to leap into the saddle and ride across the square at a gallop.

He needed to get to Allaux and tell the king what was happening.

 

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38 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 133- Trystan
  1. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Wow, he’s lucky he escaped. A great action-packed snippet! 🙂

  2. Ed Hoornaert says:

    Great action (though ouch! on that face-first bit). He’s lucky he got a fast mule.

  3. You really write action well! The face first…ouch! What a visual. 🙂

  4. Fallon says:

    Well, this doesn’t look good. Great snippet

  5. Powerful action scene and I love his mule.

  6. Great action! Really lands me in the scene.

  7. SueBarr says:

    I always thought mules were stubborn, and when you wrote he spotted his mule (thinking of a quick getaway) I immediately thought…Oh no. You’re not going anywhere fast with a mule. Color me wrong.

  8. Alexis Duran says:

    You have an interesting idea of fun, m’dear. Not sure if Trystan is enjoying himself but I certainly enjoyed reading it.

  9. Wow, dramatic indeed. Good thing he’s such a good fighter and thinks fast on his feet. Really enjoyed the snippet!

  10. Cara Bristol says:

    He’s quite the swashbuckling fighter!

  11. Hywela Lyn says:

    Very dramatic snippet and full of action. Knowing mules, I was a bit dubious of his chances when Trystan leapt onto his, but sometimes mules can surprise one!

  12. Andrea R Huelsenbeck says:

    It’s fortunate Tristan is so handy with the halberd.

  13. nancygideon says:

    What a vivid scene, Christina. You had us right in the middle of the action. Great job!

  14. elainecsc2013 says:

    I love the action in this snippet.

  15. Sounds like a close escape! Great action in this snippet! 🙂

  16. Diane Burton says:

    Super action scene. I had the same idea about mules–stubborn, usually won’t go when you want them, too, not very fast. Guess I’m wrong.

  17. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    Fantastic action scene! Great imagery.

  18. Almost halfway through and loving it! 😀

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