Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 25- Janna
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Janna and Anton have taken refuge with the helpful Maya, and Janna is trying to earn her keep by working as a tavern wench.
She was on her way back to the kitchen when someone grabbed her by the waist and pulled her onto his lap.
“Now here’s a pretty thing,” a man roared, his face too close to hers and his breath stinking of ale. “Oh come now, sweetheart,” he bounced her on his knee. “No need to be unfriendly.”
Janna shrieked and leapt up so fast she knocked him off the bench. She ran to the kitchen, followed by good-natured shouts and laughter.
“No need to cry about it, dear,” Maya said. “Just box their ears and they’ll get the picture.”
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I can’t WAIT to meet this Maya in the story. Btw, have you gotten a title yet in the midst of all that editing?
No title yet. Attempts to crowd-source on facebook have failed. I should probably try it here.
Crowd source? You’re forgetting you’re talking to a computer illiterate here. What’s that mean?
Oh, I just mean putting it out there and getting input from anyone who wants to give it.
Oh, this sounds like a positively fun scene 🙂 I’d really like to learn more about how Janna ends up dealing with the men in the tavern.
The poor thing will run away if she can. 🙂
She needs to sharpen her ear-boxing skills if she’s going to survive. ;D Terrific scene, Christina! Have you written an ad blurb for the book yet? That might help us help you come up with a title. =D
Thanks! Poor girl just isn’t cut out for that life.
I don’t have a blurb, but I need to do that soon. I’m dreading it, but I will come up with something. Watch this space! 🙂
Sounds like Maya has experience dealing with this crowd.
I don’t think you can run a tavern for any length of time without developing a somewhat thick skin!
Oh, you better believe I’ll box their ears. Love the sound of Maya. She’s my kind of lady. Great job, Christina! 🙂
I love Maya- I would like to be more like her. As it is, I’m more of a Janna. 🙂
Thank you!
Wonderful snippet. You drew me right into the tavern. I could smell the ale.
WEWRIWA gave me the titles for two of my books. All you have to do is ask!
Yes, I think I will ask- I was amazed at how quickly you got a title for your last one!
Well, that was a fun snippet! I would have reacted the same way, poor thing.
Yes, me too. Her reaction was pretty much what mine would have been. 🙂
Nice! Box away, sounds like she’s going to have a problem in here. Love this scene, great descriptions!
Yes, it’s very far from poor Janna’s natural habitat.
Thank you!
Love it! “Just box their ears…” Really good, and quite visual, 8!
Thank you!
Ok, this scene was a little too vivid- I can still smell the rank beer breath. Hope she gets tough or better yet, out of there, soon!
If you smell beer breath, my work here is done. 🙂 I think Janna will need to find another line of work.
Fabulous description. I sincerely hope after everything she’s been through Jenna can find her backbone and sharpen her ear-boxing skills. Great 8.
Thank you! Yes, this is the beginning of a long toughening-up journey for poor Janna.
The entire scene was well written, but the ending made it for me. Great job!
Aw, thanks!
Box their ears indeed! Intriguing, to be sure.
I felt for poor Janna. I’m not sure if Maya’s suggestion is the best one. Great snippet overall!
Yeah, there are some tough customers in that tavern. You’d have to box with real conviction. 🙂
Poor girl! Even if she did summon up the bravery to to box a customer’s ears, I doubt he’d feel it. 🙂
Exactly! I think dumping him onto the floor got the message across.
He sounds… lovely. o_O Hopefully he’s not angry about ending up on the floor.
A real charmer. 🙂 Now he’s in a comfortable spot if he just wants to quietly pass out.
I’ve always thought you had to be pretty tough to do well as a tavern wench, so this scene proves my theory all right. Enjoyed the excerpt!
Yeah, we don’t all have the goods for the tavern wenching life. All I had to do was picture myself in Janna’s place. 🙂
This snippet made me laugh. loved it
Aw, thanks! 🙂
Great scene! You put me right there in the tavern.
Thank you!