Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 20- Janna
Happy New Year! It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.
We last left Janna hiding in the woods with Anton, while the farm where they lived was attacked. Anyezka, Janna’s 5-year-old stepdaughter is at the farm, but there’s nothing they can do until the marauders leave. Finally, they see them coming down the road.
A woman rode at the head of the group. Tangled black curls fell down her back, over a long, dirty sheepskin coat similar to what the others wore. But while they whooped and laughed, she looked around silently, scanning the edges of the forest. Janna shrank back.
The woman slowed her horse to a stop as she sniffed the air and Janna could have sworn her eyes glowed yellow, like an animal’s. She sniffed again, then shrugged and urged her horse on. Neither Janna nor Anton breathed until they were well down the road.
“What was that?” Anton asked, still shaking
Oh, I think we know exactly who it is- though the what may still be unclear! Guess she didn’t waste any time getting right back to work after installing Braeden in his cozy dungeon.
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Ooh, chilling! I’d hate to be in Janna and Anton’s position.
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I just can’t wait to read this!
I like the over all description and flow of the writing; however, I experienced the floating or detached body part syndrome when you wrote about tangled black curls down her back. I hope they were hers. 😉
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Oh yes, I see what you mean! Even though scalping isn’t customary, I wouldn’t put it past her. 🙂
Sounds like a frightening encounter. It’s probably too much to hope that this is the last they see of this creature.
Yes, she likes to turn up wherever she’s not wanted.
Sounds like the kind of woman I don’t want to meet in a dark alley.
Beautiful details and description. I love the visual introduction to this character, really sets the tone!
Thanks, she’s a fun one to write!
Excellent description. Loved the yellow eyes!
Great visual as always, you can also really feel the intensity here. Love the eight!
This is intense, I really like it! Great job with the visuals and subtle tension. 🙂
Thank you!
I was holding my breath too! You do an excellent job of portraying her malevolence in just a few lines. Great snippet.
Thanks! It helps that I’m scared of her too. 🙂
I don’t know what that woman is, but your description of her makes me want to read this book! Awesome visuals.
Yay! Thanks. 🙂
What indeed! Good suspense and imagery!
Thank you!
Intriguing snippet! Great job with the description flow and character intro.
Thank you!
That was a very scary lady, Anton. Be glad she decided against investigating whatever she sensed–or smelled. She’s definitely got a supernatural monster vibe going on there!
I haven’t yet decided how supernaturally monstrous she is, or if she’s just using that persona to scare the crap out of people.
Happy New Year! Love this snippet, I am definitely intrigued and can feel the tension. Great 8 🙂
Thanks! Happy New Year to you too!
Whoa. Braden was pretty lucky, then, wasn’t he? o-O
This just keeps getting more and more layered, Christina—I’m really enjoying it!
Yes, he had as pretty narrow escape. Glad you like it. 🙂
Very tense. I was practically holding my breath while she was sniffing the air! Excellent excerpt…
Thank you!
Ah, there is something ever intoxicating to me about a badass woman in literature. I really hope it ISN’T the last they see of her. 😉
Wonderful as always! 🙂
Oh, I love them too! I’m trying to resist loading the story up with them because they’re so much fun to write. You’ll see more of this one, too. 🙂