Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 13- Kendryk
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While Kendryk is figuring out what to do next, he has a very bad dream. He sees himself with Father Landrus on a big battlefield and is getting a closer look at the enemy, which naturally includes the empress and her allies.
He thought he might beΒ flying, but he had no body and no wings; just eyes that could see endless distances. The enemy had row upon row of human foot-soldiers, but his blood chilledΒ when he saw the cavalry. There were huge lizards with long barbed snouts, lions with gigantic horned heads, black wolves with strange, human eyes, and above them, great birds of prey. AllΒ were ridden by creatures who might have been human, had they been more than gray skin stretched over skeletons, with gaping black holes instead ofΒ eyes, mouths and noses.
None saw him, but Kendryk Β fled back to his army with all the speed he could muster.
“You see that they have brought all of their gods,” Father Landrus said, standing next to his other, older self. “Where are yours?”
Uh-oh. What does it mean? Does it mean anything? Most importantly, will it help Kendryk make a decision? Actually, it does! This snippet was originally near the beginning, before my great reorganization, so both this Β and the previous one now come much later in the story. I will try not to cause too much further confusion. π
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Ooo! Intriguing! I was thinking this was more a straight forward war history type fantasy, but the “gods” thing takes it to a whole new level. Yummy!
Well, I’ve inserted the Reformation- very historically inaccurately- so I had to come up with a whole religious thing. I really hope I can do it justice.
I have complete faith in you! I’ve heard you talk so passionately about this stuff. Go get ’em, girl!
Freaky dream-sequence, especially the wolves with human eyes part. That just sound creepy, as I imagined my husky with human eyes… Can’t sleep, husky-man will eat me.
Hah! My work here is done. Huskies are my favorites, but not with human eyes please.
Fantastic descriptive writing.
Thank you!
Fabulous imagery. The question Landrus asks is very powerful. I can imagine how it might change Kendryk’s entire life.
Yeah, it’s about to. Thank you!
Wow! Having to face such an army is scary and intimidating. I wonder about the meaning of the Father’s question. Visual and strong snippet. Great 8.
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That would be a terrifying dream. I really like how the bit of dialogue at the end adds another layer to it.
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Kendryk has to make a decision, that’s for sure. I agree with the other comments about the snippet having strong visuals. Nicely done.
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Well that’s scary and then the question really puts the cap on the whole scene. Can’t wait for more…excellent excerpt!
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I am curious about the “brought all their gods.” Does this mean Odin, Kali or Louhi might show up? Or is it a more symbolic? Great image and hint at more to come.
My society is polytheistic, but the dream is mostly symbolic, at least for now. Thanks for stopping by!
YIKES! They’ve brought all their Gods and he’s brought nothing to the battle but dreams. Exciting snippet.
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omg that was chilling!! i loved it! so exciting whats going to happen next?? this is how you do war!!! love everything about this snippet, Christina! xoxo
Thank you so much!
Very descriptive. Love the imagery. Oh, man. I hope he has gods that he can bring to this fight. :).
Thank you! He’s got a lot to figure out.
I wouldn’t like to fight alongside something like that–I’d be worried they don’t discriminate friends from foe. But I really wouldn’t want to fight against them! Where’s a rocket launcher when you need one? π
Oh, if only I could figure out how to include a rocket launcher! So many plot problems solved. π
That’s a downright scary description. Well done.
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Uh oh! Where are his gods??? That description is fantastic, Christina. That’s one war I want no part of–except maybe to read about it. π
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That last line gives me goosebumps—that’s the point where I’d wake up in a cold sweat, all right.
Very interesting scene!
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More important, who are his gods?
Totally made up by me at this point!
That was some great description and a terrific hook. Well done!
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Ha, great snippet! I love that closing remark, βWhere are yours?β Love the flying aspect in the beginning as well.
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Ooh…! What are they?! That’s the kind of stuff that’ll leave you with nightmares. I like it!