Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 186- Devyn
It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.
The good news is, most of the snippets I’ve posted so far from Sword of Destiny have made the cut. The bad news is, I got rid of nearly 40k words that I won’t be using. But that leads to more good news, which is that I have plenty of new words to write for NaNoWriMo. So you see, I’m a glass half full kind of girl. 🙂
On with the story. After Devyn escaped Henryk and General Karsten’s attempt to capture him, he’s trying to decide what to do next while Trisa fixes up his bumps and bruises. Magnus is the king’s commander in chief, who has strictly ordered Devyn not to make another move without him.
“I’m not sitting around and letting Brun get away with this,” Devyn said.
“We need to wait for Magnus,” Trisa waved a servant out after ordering him to bring some tea.
“Who knows when he’ll be back? We shouldn’t wait; if we do, harvest might be over and Brun will be back at full strength.”
“He might be back at full strength anyway,” Trisa said, “now he knows you’re here and you’re mad.”
“Does he think I’ll attack because of my temper?” The idea annoyed Devyn, but he wondered if there was a way to take advantage of such an assumption.
“He might; It’s safe to say we shouldn’t underestimate him.”
“Why are you suddenly being so cautious?”
“He almost captured you; it was much too close.”
Devyn was warmed by the concern in Trisa’s eyes; nice to know how much she loved him.
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Love this snippet, Christina. Always remarkable.
Thank you, Charmaine!
Her concern is very sweet. I wonder if it will make a difference in what he decides.
It’s hard to get him to deviate from a path when he’s decided on it.
Does anyone actually believe Devyn will just sit still and wait? 😉 Great snippet.
Others keep hoping, but they don’t know him as well as you do. 😉
Glad you only had to cut 40K. *Gulp* Happy NANO writing! I’m glad she’s so concerned over him as well. It’s always nice to know one is loved.
To soften the blow,I always tell myself I can use all those deleted scenes to create a whole tie-in novel, which I probably never will. 🙂
Why do I have the definite feeling he’s going to do something rash, and without waiting around? Loved the excerpt, you could see the character’s mental wheels turning…skillfully done.
Sounds like you’ve gotten to know this guy pretty well!
She’s wise to be cautious, even if it doesn’t make a difference.
Definitely glad he has a voice of reason near his side!
Great snippet and I think everybody above said what I wanted to say.
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Fun interchange. And I agree with the other comments– he probably won’t sit around and wait.
Her concern is sweet and yes, I think he should not rush and fall into a trap. 🙂 Great snippet. The banter is great.
Thank you!
Sorry for showing up so late. The very idea of tossing away 40K hard-won words sends shivers down my back.
It was painful at first, then surprisingly liberating!
Cutting 40k words? I’d cry. But if it makes your story stronger, good for you. Devyn needs to get real. I hope she can convince him.
I almost did! But it wasn’t as bad as the time I cut 70k. I hope I never have to do that again.