Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 146- Teodora

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Continuing with Blood of the Empire: Shortly after freeing her, General Mattila demands that Teodora abdicate. Teodora has a seizure at the very idea, blacks out, and wakes up to Elektra telling her how things are going to be. Horrendously punctuated to fit.

Elektra cleared her throat. “I realize you don’t want to abdicate, but I’m taking over for now, until you’re better. Someone needs to be in charge.”

“You? You know you’ll be Mattila’s puppet.”

“I don’t think so,” Elektra’s voice was calm,“I can manage her well enough.”

Teodora couldn’t believe what she was hearing, “You can’t do this; it’s illegal and has never happened in the history of the empire.”

“It’s not at all illegal to remove a mentally unfit sovereign,” Elektra said, patting Teodora’s hand–as if that would make it better. “I know you’re strong, Mother, and that you’ll likely recover. When that happens, I’ll gladly give you your power back.”

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19 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 146- Teodora
  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    Knowing Teodora, I can just imagine her rage at being called ‘mentally unfit.’ As a result, this snippet has a welcome touch of dark humor.

  2. Fallon says:

    Yeah, I don’t see Teodora taking any of this well.

  3. Jess Schira says:

    Not an easy conversation to have with one’s mother. And one I suspect is going to have far reaching, long term consequences. Fantastic snippet, Christina.

  4. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Oh, I don’t think that’s going to go over well, but at least Elektra is trying. Nice snippet! 🙂

  5. Jenna Jaxon says:

    “I’ll gladly give you your power back.” Yeah, that’s what they all say. What they actually do–not so much. Teodora had best be on her guard!

  6. nancygideon says:

    Well, she could have sent Mommy Dearest out on an ice flow so what is Teodora complaining about? Something tells me this kinder gentler solution will come back to bite her. . . hard.

  7. This is a marvelous snippet with all the drama of Daughter and mother.

  8. Yeah! Go Elektra! Woo! 😀

  9. Alexis Duran says:

    Ha! I’m not surprised Teodora had a seizure at the very thought. I hope Elektra is strong enough to resist the sh** storm that’s about to hit.

  10. Oh – trickery or possibly treachery!

  11. Well I for one am waiting with bated breath for Teodora to explode over this development! Really a terrific excerpt and has me thinking all kind of plot thoughts…well done.

  12. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    I have a hunch Teodora isn’t going to be calm about this. lol

  13. Karma–to the nth degree! LOVE this!!

  14. I have some doubt about Theodora will feel about this plan.

  15. Hywela Lyn says:

    Oh this snippet fairly sizzles with tension! I see a lot of trouble ahead!

  16. That seems bound for conflict.

  17. aldreaalien says:

    Oh yes, this change of power is going to happen so smoothly.

  18. Diane Burton says:

    Famous last words? “I’ll gladly give you your power back.”

  19. Lyn Perry says:

    Ha. Will believe it when she sees it. Nice job.

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