Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 142- Trystan

It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

It’s October, which means it’s also time for the First Page Review Blog Hop. Writers post the first 1000 words of their WIP to get some feedback. I have the beginning of my first in a new series, Shield of Kings, up there.

This week, I’m continuing with Blood of the Empire. While Elektra and Mattila bargain for Teodora’s release with her captor, Trystan’s mom, Trystan himself is headed that way, hoping to reach Teodora before anyone else does. Some of you might recognize the other character. 🙂 Edited and horribly punctuated to fit.

As Trystan neared the border, he kept a cautious eye out for Mattila, but ran into his mother’s army instead. Or at least, what used to be his mother’s army.

“You must not go home, Your Grace,” Sonya Vidmar–the general in charge–said as they sat at a small table set up in the shade of an oak tree, Trystan taking advantage of the break to have a cool mug of ale.

“Isn’t Teodora still there?”

“I don’t know–she was,” Vidmar’s weathered face was anxious, “but your mother let her out of the dungeon a few days ago when she heard about the battle and that Mattila was coming to negotiate Teodora’s release.”

“What?” Trystan couldn’t believe that, even of his mother.

“I wish it weren’t true; it seems both you and I were to join Mattila’s forces.”

“Never,” Trystan had to stop himself from punching the table.

“I agree; I have my own history with Teodora and wouldn’t survive one day in her power. I doubt things would go much better for you.”

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25 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 142- Trystan
  1. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Oh, I wonder what he will do. I love the building of tension here. 🙂

  2. Fallon says:

    Oh, yikes. Yeah, I don’t think that would be good. What will Trystan do?

  3. nancygideon says:

    Whoa! They’re between a rock and a hard place. Nice set up Christina.

  4. Always very complex politics and everything else in this world, but it comes back down to the people involved, which is so true to life! Enjoyed the snippet and his reactions to the various pieces of news.

  5. daryldevore says:

    Great snippet. Tension is building.

  6. Alexis Duran says:

    Nice to see Sonya back in play. I feel better with her on Trystan’s side.

  7. Sonya!!! Also it looks like Trystan is in trouble. Again. 😉

  8. I suspect Sonya is giving sage advice to unheeding ears.

  9. kimmydonn says:

    Great snippet, curious too.

  10. I wonder why his mother let Teodora go? I’m sure we will find out. Great snippet.

  11. Some days, you just can’t win. I’m sure there are reasons for releasing the scary lady, but now I wonder what Teodora is going to do with that freedom.

  12. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    Cool, Sonya is back. Looks like things aren’t going to be easy for Trystan. Love the setup. Great tension building.

  13. “What used to be his mother’s army” – great tension in that one sentence!

  14. Diane Burton says:

    Great snippet. I want to know more!

  15. Ed Hoornaert says:

    This snippet hints at a labyrinth of conflicts Good job.

    Sorry for being tardy to comment. Blame *#@!@ LAX for getting me home a day late.

  16. Oh, Teodora on the loose… Yikes!

    She does get hers in the end, right?? lol

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