Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 92- Braeden
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From Hammer of the Gods: Last week, Elektra betrayed Braeden to the enemy. Fortunately for him, the person sent to bring him in is Franca Dura, an old friend. Franca is mad at him, since Braeden’s rescue of Kendryk got their whole unit into trouble, but not mad enough to see him executed. Edited from the published version. Franca is speaking:
βIβm not bringing you in. I wanted to at first, but now that I see you, I canβt do it.β
So he wasnβt prepared when she tackled him. He hit the ground with a thud, and then she was on him, landing a heavy punch to his jaw. His head exploded with pain, but he laid back and didnβt struggle. Heβd taught her how to punch like that. He was ready for another blow, but it never came.
βI hate that I canβt do it,β she whispered through clenched teeth, still straddling him, βbut youβre the closest thing I ever had to a father, and mostly, you were a good one. And after what happened to Janna and the little ones, I donβt blame you for trying something crazy. I half wanted to myself.β
If you haven’t read Valley of the Shadow, Braeden and Janna married and had two kids, but they all died when Teodora destroyed the city where they were living. Braeden rescued Kendryk by way of getting back at Teodora, which is why he was already in trouble before kidnapping Elektra.
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very emotionally charged, good snippet.
Thanks!
You DO know Braeden is my favorite character, right? Please tell me it’s not HIM you’re going to kill off!?
Yes, I know. π But I’m going to have to kill someone’s favorite, or favorites, by the time we’ve reached the end. I already had one reader quit the series, furious at me for killing Janna. Who knew writing could be such a dangerous business?
Braeden got lucky here. I hope his luck doesn’t run out. It sounds like he did what others wanted to do, but didn’t have the guts to do. Great snippet! π
Yeah, he made a lot of powerful friends with his great deed, and a lot of powerful enemies too!
What a way to greet a friend!
Poor Braeden, what a way to reunite with an old friend. I’m glad she isn’t taking him in though…very tangled webs being woven in your novel, well done!
Thanks! For some reason, a lot of people in my stories have trouble picking a side and sticking with it!
After the betrayal it seems like he got lucky. Layers on layers of conflicting motives. Nice.
Thank you! Braeden is like a cat, with his many lives, but he’s already used up a few!
Poignant. Well told. You are quite a writer, Christina.
Thanks, Charmaine!
You write such good visuals, and emotionally charged scenes, Christina. This is a fine example of that!
Thanks Reesie!
Probably not the reunion one would hope for, but perhaps in this case he lucked out with just a punch when it could have ended so much worse. Emotional snippet.
Yes, he did get lucky this time!
I definitely enjoyed Braeden’s storyline in this book. He’s very real, complicated and wants revenge–even starts to act on it–You did a great job with that guy!
Marcia
Thanks! He’s always fun to write.
Loved this interchange. She’s smart enough to know herself, how she would feel if she betrayed him. Very emotionally charged scene.
There’s a big difference between being unable to get him killed, and being unable to hurt him, clearly. But perhaps he deserved a punch.
Is she giving him love taps, or does she mean it? BTW, I forgot to add my snippet to the WeWriWa list, but itβs up and eager for readers.
She means it, sorta. π I wondered if you’d taken the weekend off!
I loved this scene so much! I was honestly holding my breath because I didn’t know what she would do! Great job, as always! π
Intense, emotional scene. Good snippet.
Hmm. It would seem she is not the only one who “can’t”.
Looking forward to reading more of their story Christina!
Thanks, Kim!
very emotional snippet. Great!
Her anger and frustration come through very well. And the fact that she cares for him. Great snippet.
Thank you!
It’s nice to see a story with a strong, tough woman who can take care of herself. π
I like to keep a lot of those around. π
Great snippet. She’s a strong woman. Love it!
Oh, a lot of emotion in that, as well as a lot of muscle! Good snippet!