Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 89- Teodora
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While Braeden and Elektra plot against her, Teodora is having other problems. In order to extort more money from the defeated King Arryk, she’s thrown her hostage, Arryk’sย (and Gwynneth’s) little brother Aksel into the Arnfels dungeon. To her surprise, her youngest daughter Zofya, comes to plead for his release, professing her love for him (she’s about fourteen). Teodora wonders how Zofya and Aksel got to know each other, since she never has any idea what her kids are up to. Somewhat edited and horrendously punctuated.
โMother Hela, my scientific instructor, says Iโm particularly good at experimentation, and Aksel is of course a brilliant scientist,” Zofya said.. “Iโve spent hours in the school laboratory with him, and weโve invented aโโ
โYouโve what?โ Teodora nearly came out of her chair. โYouโve been spending time alone with Aksel Roussay?โ
Zofya had the good sense to look mildly alarmed, then said, โMother Hela and the other students are always there, but Aksel and I have become good friends; he says Iโm nearly as clever as his sister, and everyone knows sheโsโโ
โStop that,โ Teodora snapped. โYou cannot trust him, and you will never see him again, even if that means I have to keep him in the Arnfels for the rest of his life.”
Zofyaโs lip trembled as she said, โBut you must let him go, Mother; weโve nearly finished a device which couldโโ
โI donโt care about your stupid device,โ Teodora screamed, unwilling to believe this was happening..
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Oh my gosh! Not a fan of Teodora with that excerpt. I want to know what they’ve built. Intriguing excerpt! ๐
Yes, she’s not interested in science at all. And not very nice, on top of that!
I quite like Aksel. I think he’s one of my favorite characters! ๐
I like him too. He’s like my nerdy alter ego, but better at standing up to Teodora than I would ever be!
But what is it they are inventing? I am dying to know, Christina!
All shall be revealed … eventually. ๐
Ooh, very intriguing! What kind of device is this?
You’ll have to wait until Teodora isn’t around, so someone can get a word in edgewise. ๐
One can only hope that the device is something fantastic that Teodora will never get her hands on because she’s mean and has a big mouth. Love this. ๐
Haha, yes. She’s so unpleasant, everyone tries to thwart her in every way they can.
Love this, Christina. Great dialog. I’m hooked.
Thank you!
Love this snippet. Dying to learn what they invented. Good little Zofiya to plead on behalf of Aksel, but it sounds as though it has got her in trouble.
All shall be revealed eventually! ๐
I really enjoyed this part. Teodora’s head was spinning for quite a while in this story, and it was great to see her knocked off balance!
Marcia
Yes, she likes to think her kids are firmly under her control, but really … Not so much. ๐
I can sympathize with Zofya, I have a little crush on Aksel too.
Who doesn’t? Well, maybe Teodora. ๐
Teodora’s a fool not to hear what the device is. Knowledge is always a good thing. Bet it’s going to bite her in the butt in the end.
She needs to learn to get her temper under control. It messes up all kinds of things for her.
Oh boy! This doesn’t look good. Great snippet, Christina!
Good one! What on earth have they invented?
I like Zofya’s courage, even if this discussion isn’t going too well. Thee device is certainly intriguing! Great snippet.
I like to picture her as a mini-Teodora, but before her personality went horribly wrong. ๐
I have a feeling that Zofya is going to be a formidable opponent.
I love that Zofya looked “mildly alarmed.” LOL! She’s got some steel in her spine if Teodora doesn’t scare her.
Yes, she’s already one of the few people who can stand up to Teodora.
At 14, the girl’s love life is already given mom ulcers. Wait a few years; it’ll get worse.
Haha, yes, pretty much!
She’s definitely not willing to listen. That’s not usually a good idea–who knows how useful this device could be?
Yeah, Teodora is always yelling first, asking questions later, if at all. ๐
Theodora needs an attitude adjustment. Can they invent a device for that? Good snippet.
Haha, yes. That’s the next project.
That was unpleasant. I don’t like Theodora much.
No one does. ๐
Oh, that mother is just shoving the daughter toward trouble! Unwise.
Yes, she’s going to be sorry.
I’m with Elizabethโย Teodora needs an attitude adjustment ASAP! You’d think she’d have gotten one after the events of the last book, but… *sighs* I really do loathe her. By which I mean, wow, you wrote an amazing villainess. ๐
Why thank you- I try. ๐
Yeah, definitely not liking Teodora. Great snippet
Ooo, what’s the bet that Teodora will definitely end up caring about the device? Good snippet.