Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 61- Kendryk
Itβs time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. Thereβs a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.
I’m not sure how many more snippets I’ll be posting from Rise of the Storm. It feels like ancient history for me right now. The sequel, Valley of the Shadow is with my beta readers and I’m already 20K words into the next one, Hammer of the Gods. So I’ll give you a few more drama-filled moments, then move on.
Things are going from bad to worse for poor Kendryk. Not only has Teodora broken the siege of her capital with Braeden’s and General Barela’s help, she’s made peace with her strongest opponent and now has her whole army at her disposal. Which she will probably use on Kendryk. On top of that, while out with his army, Β a bunch of other stuff has happened back home. He receivesΒ an ominous letter from Father Landrus, telling him to returnΒ right away. So Kendryk hurries home, worried that something terrible has happened to his family, and barges in on Gwynneth and Arian Orland, IN HER BEDROOM! They’re just talking, but–
“Let me explain,” Gwynneth began.
Kendryk stared at her. “How can you possibly explain this? There is only one reason he would be here.”
“Nothing was happening, or going to happen,” Arian said. “She was ending it.”
Which meant there was something to end. Arian took one more step and Kendryk’s fist shot out and hit him square in the jaw. Pain flashed up Kendryk’s hand, momentarily clearing his head.
Arian stumbled back, but rather than reach for him, Gwynneth stepped out of the way.
Not only is there now big trouble in paradise, Arian Orland is (was?) Β Kendryk’s only ally. Uh-oh.
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Not a good idea, punching out your friends. Just imagine what he must do to his enemies!
In general, Kendryk is a lover, not a fighter. But some things are worth punching your friends for.
Broke my heart for poor Kendryk.
I do hate torturing him, but do it anyway. π
Ending what? In her bedroom? Not a smart place for any man to do business! We are agog Christina! What a cliff hanger!
Just a tad suspicious, isn’t it? Guess I’ll have to continue with this part next week.
Woohoo! Talk about some great conflict in the story! Nicely done, Christina. I didn’t expect that at all. the only one more surprised than me right now is Kendryk. π
Thanks, Teresa! I like to pile the grief onto characters I really love.
Great catch here, “Which meant there was something to end.” Kendryk is no dummy. Great scene!
Thanks! He’s putting two and two together pretty quickly.
‘βNothing was happening, or going to happen,β Arian said. βShe was ending it.β
Which meant there was something to end. ‘
Uh….oops. :O I love this snippet, Christina, and this part especially. Just some terrific writing!
Thanks, Steven!
Oh, those men and their testosterone! lol. Great job showing the jealousy in this moment. I’ve really been enjoying these excerpts, Christina! π
Aw, thanks Evelyn!
What a great spot to end the excerpt, too! Please pick up from there next week, we gotta see what happens π
Well, since you ask nicely. π
Hot stuff and grounds for a fight. Christina, you’ve written a fascinating tale
Ah yes… I remember this. My heart broke a little at it. Well, it did for Kendryk and Gwennyth. I love the upcoming titles by the way, especially Hammer of the Gods! That sounds badass.
This reminds me of a scene in a ’90s show where the boy walks in, pulls a blanket away from his wife and best friend, and yells out “UNDERPANTS!”
Except, of course, this was done with more tension and resulted in a bit of a fisticuffs. And I wiggle my eyebrows at what those two were doing behind closed doors!
I’m still mad at Gwynneth, you know. And Arian deserved more than a punch. Great scene.
Fast work there! Strike first and ask questions later.
They certainly come off as guilty, but punching people is not the way to make friends!
Interesting development. That was a rather telltale phrase about ending it. Enjoyed the excerpt, glad to hear the new book is going so well.
When a conversation starts with – let me explain – you just know it isn’t going to end well!
Cliffhanger much!!! What happens next???
IN HER ROOM. Ugh, makes it that much more annoying. I loved the pacing and the reading between the lines. Great job!