Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 51- Janna

weekend writing warriorsIt’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

I missed last week completely. I’m getting ready to have surgery on my sinuses on Monday, and was taking medication to help clear things up, but it gave me horrible headaches for several days. I was forced to take time off from the computer, and survived! But now I’m better and after Monday, should stay better for a good long time. It’s nice to be back.

After a few weeks of detouring into Valley of the Shadow, I’m back to Rise of the Storm. We last left Janna and Anton being intimidated by some badly behaved soldiers, and things got even worse after that The soldiers raped Janna, leaving her unconscious, and when she woke up, Anton had disappeared:

Janna lurched from tree to tree, keeping the road in view while whispering Anton’s name until the sun rose. When the first voices came from the road, she disappeared into the woods, walking for leagues until she collapsed from exhaustion. Out of habit, she found water and crawled along the creek for a while. For a day or two she did nothing but sleep and drink water from forest streams.

She kept calling for Anton although she no longer expected to find him. Before she could stop herself, she prayed to the Mother to help her find him and to the Father to protect him if he still lived. Then she cursed herself for a stupid, ignorant girl. Everything she’d learned about the gods was wrong. They were supposed to protect the good and punish the wicked. But that was a lie.

Previous snippets are here.

You can read the rest of the story in Rise of the Storm. Click on the cover to buy on Amazon or read for free on Kindle Unlimited.

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15 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 51- Janna
  1. Kim Magennis says:

    I missed you last week! I am glad you are feeling a bit better. Best wishes for Monday.

    Poor Janna! An excellent piece Christina. That must be the worst kind of frantic there is.

  2. Ed Hoornaert says:

    Oh my, I feel for the poor girl.

  3. Gemma Parkes says:

    Wonderful writing and imagery, i can feel her desperation so well. Good luck with the operation, sinuses are a nuisance.

  4. pmillhouse says:

    It breaks my heart to see her losing faith like that. Thanks for sharing, Christina! And good luck with your surgery.

  5. I remember this part of the book. I was so sad for Janna– she wasn’t ready for anything that happened to her. I hope you feel better soon! Be sure to relax. 🙂

  6. So beautifully written, Christina.
    I’ve had sinus surgery. It sucks! Be well, my friend

  7. Alexis Duran says:

    I always appreciated Janna’s view- as opposed to princes and generals- we see the true horror of war. Makes it so much more poignant.

  8. Sarah W says:

    Janna is the strongest example of why this entire country needs major adjustments.

    I remember thinking “there are no atheists in foxholes,” but Janna has finally come to the end of her rope.

    I hope your surgery goes well and all is fixed! 🙂

  9. daezarkian says:

    Wow, this took a dark turn. Wonderfully written, Christine, you really bring out that pain and emotion!

  10. Gods tend to be a bit of a-holes. Power and no responsibility. Still, sometimes they help out a mortal who needs it…

  11. Glad you’re feeling better!
    Emotional and powerful. Great job.

  12. Best wishes with the surgery! The snippet was intense and shows how strong your character is, must have been hard to write the things that occur to her. I admire your craft!

  13. Wonderful imagery — felt a bit like Hunger Games, but better!! Love this. Best of luck on your sinus surgery — will be thinking of you!!

  14. Ooh, I like it! She’s obviously out of it, physically, but mentally and emotionally as well. Clearly this (and perhaps other events as well) have left her empty and lost. Great snippet.

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