Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 30- Braeden

wewriwaIt’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

Not only did Braeden get released from the dungeon, he gets to meet the Empress Teodora! Lucky for him, she needs a scary-looking bodyguard to help her intimidate Kendryk.  Of course she just has to poke at Braeden’s sore spot, the nasty marauder, Daciana Tomescu. Edited to squeeze something somewhat coherent into eight sentences.

“He looks very frightening,” Teodora said gleefully. “I think I’ll have him stand behind me at all times in full armor. I can see why Daciana wanted me to get rid of him, but I need to remember she’s just too competitive.”

“Competitive? I’d say she’s . .” Franca elbowed him in the ribs before he could continue, whileTeodora jumped off her horse and stood across from him.

“The dungeon didn’t work very well on you, did it?” She laughed, showing large, even teeth, none of which- to Braeden’s relief- appeared to be fangs.

“Seems not,” he said, adding, “Your Highness,” before he got another jab from Franca.


Previous snippets are here.

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13 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 30- Braeden
  1. daezarkian says:

    Great snippet, Christine — love the dialogue!

  2. Eleri Stone says:

    Teodora seems like an interesting character, and I like how Braeden doesn’t seem particularly intimidated by her. Curious to see how they get on together:)

  3. It’s a whole different world you’ve painted in this eight. Good job.

  4. Alexis Duran says:

    Love the fangs comment- reminds me that this is a very different world we’re in. So when do the rest of us get to read it??? (No pressure :))

  5. Great eight! Really liked the easy flowing conversation. 🙂

  6. caitlinstern says:

    He really needs to learn to keep his mouth shut, or he’ll be right back in that dungeon–or worse.

  7. Carrie-Anne says:

    I love the interplay between them. They seem to have a natural rapport, even if they’re not exactly friends.

  8. Intriguing exchange. Great dialogue and I’m curious why Braeden is not intimidated or worried he’s standing in front of the Empress. Love how Franca keeps poking him;). Great 8.

  9. Sarah W says:

    Were fangs a literal possibility? From the other snippets, I half expected them! 😀

  10. LOL! I love it. He looks frightening so I’ll have him stand behind me. 🙂 Great job. 🙂

  11. I like everything about Braeden so I wish him well. The empress is very interesting, love her attitude. Excellent excerpt!

  12. That fangs comment is wonderful! Another good 8, Christina!

  13. ralfast says:

    I see a very messy bloody battlefield in the near future.

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