Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 15- Braeden

wewriwaIt’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

When we last saw Braeden, he had decided to arrest Daciana Tomescu, marauder and personal friend to Empress Teodora. He’s taken her straight to Atlona, the empress’s capital, and is hoping to get rid of his prisoner without upsetting the empress. He really can be clueless sometimes!.

It would take time to find Prince Novitny’s black banners in the sea of tents covering the parade ground so Braeden brought his party to a halt. “Find the prince and tell him we’ve got an interesting prisoner, so I’ll want his help handling the empress,” he said to Franca.

Before she could go, a column of twelve women in the gold armor and red velvet of the Imperial Guard approached them. It seemed that word of Tomescu’s capture had traveled faster than he had. Braeden hoped they were here to take her off his hands.

“Braeden Terris?” a tall, very red-faced woman at the head of the column asked.

When Braeden nodded, she said, “You are under arrest by order of her Imperial Highness, and will proceed with us to Arnfels Castle.”

It was to be the dungeon, then.

I’m not sure if I’ll participate in WeWriWa next week. I’ll be spending the long weekend with family and probably won’t have time. I will miss all of you! I always look forward to Sundays and seeing what amazing things you’ve come up with. Happy Thanksgiving!

Previous snippets are here.

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30 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 15- Braeden
  1. calensariel says:

    So did Braeden consider that this might happen?

    • He thought he might have to smooth some ruffled feathers- which is why he wanted to get his well-connected boss before doing anything else- but no, he was completely unaware of just how close the empress and Daciana are.

  2. I am very interested in the unusual gendering in this passage (and the others). I look forward to what else you might post. 🙂

    • Thanks! It’s been an interesting challenge, trying to guess how Europe might have developed with a less patriarchal religion in place through the middle ages. It would probably have been very different from what I’ve come up with, but I hope it still all makes sense!

  3. Frank Fisher says:

    Oh! :-O I didn’t expect her to place him under arrest. I’d like to know what he’ll say about that? Nice snippet.

  4. Alexis Duran says:

    I’m worried for Braeden but looking forward to meeting the Empress! I also like the apparent presence of female warriors on the field. Everything about this snippet makes me want to read more.

  5. I’m hoping he doesn’t end up in the dungeon!

  6. I love the female warriors! And I think I’m as shocked as Braeden that he’s been arrested!

  7. Sarah W says:

    Poor guy. Doesn’t seem fair to me—unless he’d been warned about leaving Tomescu alone? In that case, he probably should have a lesson on who the Empress is and what that means. just for his own survival! 🙂

    Your writing style is an excellent match to this, Christina—very natural and smooth.

    • Thank you!

      Braeden’s a stickler for following orders, but he never got any about Tomescu. Anyone who knows her usually just tries to stay out of her way. He figured that one out a little too late. 🙂

  8. He’s in for a lot of trouble. Love the female warriors. You’ve brought us into a time and place unheard of. Good writing.

  9. Evelyn Jules says:

    The dungeon? Ruh-roh. Can’t wait for more! Hope you have a fantastic Thanksgiving, Christina!

  10. Awe have a great Thanksgiving!!! Enjoy!!! Can’t wait till you get back & awesome snippet as always. 🙂

  11. caitlinstern says:

    Of course the worst case scenario happened. Isn’t how it always goes? He’s going to need some luck to get out of this one, I bet!

  12. The Empress was one step ahead of him the whole time!! love it!! and great scene set up! Have a happy thanksgiving with your family, Christina! I love reading your snippets each week!

  13. I had a feeling Braeden was underestimating the ripple effect from his decision to take the prisoner. Poor guy! Can’t wait to see what happens next, excellent excerpt…

  14. I love his response: It was supposed to be the dungeon, then. Great line. Have a wonderful time next weekend.

  15. What a plot twist! Everything about this 8 works, Christina. Nicely done. 😉

    Happy Thanksgiving. We’ll miss you too next week. 🙂

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