Weekend Writing Warriors- Snippet 11: Braeden
It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.
Even though I don’t like to spend more than two weeks with any one character- I feel like a guilty neglectful mother toward the others right now- I decided not to be cruel and leave you hanging. Last week, Braeden was standing toe-to-toe with Daciana Tomescu, a rather unpleasant piece of work. He’s pretty upset about the burning town and dead civilians, so he takes a rash step.
“Since you can’t produce any written orders, I will have to arrest you for engaging in illegal activities on Her Majesty’s lands. I’m going to Atlona, so I will take you there and the Empress can vouch for you, if she likes.”
“You’re a brave man Braeden Terris,” Tomescu laughed, her eyes turning dark again. “The Empress won’t be happy that you interfered with me and killed some of my people. Though I suppose that shaggy head of yours will look well enough on a spike above the market gate,” she added with a shrug.
Braeden wondered how she knew his name, but didn’t want to give her the satisfaction of asking. “Lieutenant, please secure the lady,” he said to Miro, hoping his tone made it clear she was no such thing. “And Captain, please see that all the other raiders are tied together and taken back to camp.”
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It’s little details like feeling that tension hanging between them that makes your work seem so real. You sure have got this, Christina!
Aw, thank you!
So if I understand you correctly….you’ll leave us hanging next week instead When you go onto another character ? 🙂 Great snippet.
Well, now he needs some relatively uneventful travel time so he can get to the next disaster. 🙂 I’m not being too mean, I swear!
Braeden is not a funny guy. I hope he really knows what he is doing, I kind of like him, a beheading would be awful.
He’s used to people doing as they’re told, at least when he tells them to. He might be in over his head this time. 🙂
Like mentioned above – you write tension so well. And the characterization is so strong even in this short snippet. Well crafted writing!
Thank you so much!
Oh she is a sassy one. Love her shaggy head on a spike line. 🙂 That’s just perfect. Great 8 with lots going on.
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Yes, she is a handful! Thanks!
Fine snippet. You’ve taken me to time and place where I’m the observer to a catastrophe. Strong characters written so well
Thank you so much!
Oh, I like how nice and vague she is ad the way her eyes change. Her line about his head on a pike is wonderful. Great job.
Thank you!
I think he’s going to regret bringing her along. Just lop of her head, Braeden, and run! Love how she oozes wickedness.
Yes, the fact that he fails to cut off her head will cause a lot of future suffering, for him and for others. She is a very bad girl!
Love the tension between them. Great battle of wills beginning here!
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Oh my, I don’t see this ending well. The writing is crisp and drew me right in. Nicely done.
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Wonderful tension and an interesting development to the story.
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This will probably make more sense in context, but it’s scary enough as it is.
Nicely done, Christina. I totally relate to her. 😉 Great tension, can’t wait to see how this unfolds!
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Sounds like he has his hands full.
These two definitely don’t see eye to eye but I enjoyed their crackling dialog! Can’t wait for more…terrific snippet.
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He’s only following his orders, sounds like–but somehow I doubt the boss of someone as… refined… as Tomescu will let him get away with interfering.
Yes, orders are not high on the list of these -er- “ladies'” priorities!
I can really feel the intensity in this scene.
Ooh! These she’s are in trouble! Great snippet, I love the heated moment that you created!
Thank you!
Great snippet, the tension between the two is palpable, and you’ve pulled in some great characterization as well – one who seems to like to play by the rules and another who… well, perhaps she prefers to make her own rules. 🙂
Thanks so much! I really enjoy writing these characters.